Mabel's Composition

"Oh my!" I gasped. I looked at the newspaper. It read, "DOG killed in car accident". I stared at the words. MY Dog had a near death experience recently too.

"Muuum...! I'm going to take Nali for a walk!", I called out to my mother. I put a leash around my loyal dog, Nali. We went for our daily walk. When we were walking along a pavement, we could see three boys playing football on the other side of the road. I continued walking with Nali as I heard a familiar sound.. "Buoiinng". I turned around and gasped at the boys. Their ball was bobbing towards the road! Deep in awe, I released my clutch off the leash as my hands covered my mouth.

Nali thought one of the boys was playing with her and raced towards the ball on the road. A car sped towards Nali."Nali....move!", I shouted. My mind began to race. The driver of the car saw Nali with his mouth agape in horror. I was frightened out of my wits as terror gripped me. The driver tried to avoid hitting Nali and applied his brakes with all his might. I watched helplessly. My heart was still pounding uncontrollably.

Luckily, Nali looked up in time and dashed away and sprinted back to me. My clammy palms grabbed her instantaneously. I tagged the leash on her collar again. The driver felt relieved that all was alright. One of the boys, who was already red-faced felt guilty and apologised to me. I accepted his apology and returned home. I informed my mother of the incident.

"Woof woof". My thoughts were disrupted by Nali's barks. Nali's fur brushed against my legs. I hugged her. "I'm glad you are safe", I whispered into her ears.

Siti's Essay

'Can I bring Jacky to the park?' I suggested to Mum. 'Alright!' Mum replied zealously. 'Please take care of yourself,' Mum warned me. 'Sure, Mum', I replied lazily.

The weekends are undoubtedly my favourite time of the week. This is because I get to bring Jacky, my favourite pet dog, for a walk at the nearby park. Jacky is a friendly and loyal dog. It was a beautiful day and I was certain we were going to have a wonderful time together. As we strolled along the pavement, we saw a group of boys on the opposite side of the road playing volleyball. Jacky loved catching balls. He stood watching the boys with his leash on.

The ball accidentally landed on the road instead. Jacky rushed forward to retrieve the ball. At that same moment, there was a car approaching speedily on the road. The driver screeched to a halt so as to avoid hitting Jacky. But it was too late. The poor dog was lying unconsciously on the ground. He landed in a crumpled heap. I looked at my pathetic Jacky with tears streaming down my cheeks. I rushed to Jacky's side and cradled him in my arms. I assured him that all would be fine. He whined in pain. By then a crowd had congregated.

Without furthur delay, the driver rushed Jacky to the nearby vet. The vet reported that Jacky had superficial injuries. Feeling apologetic, the driver paid for Jacky's medical bill. I promised myself that I would take good care of my beloved pet and be more cautious in the future. It was a great relief that nothing serious happened to Jacky.

P4 English CA1 - Koobits Writing Project

Dear 4A,

Your task for the above-mentioned activity will be a Diary Entry. You are given 3 compulsory entry dates. They are : -

- Chinese New Year Celebrations in school (2nd Feb 2011)
- Your CCA ( Any date in Jan/Feb 2011 ) - Tues / Fri
- Total Defence Day cum Rainbow Day (15 Feb 2011)

Your Koobits E-Diary will include the Cover
- Main Title : Mrs Fernandez’s Diary
- Sub-Title : Wonderful memories of 2011 (if you want - optional)

Style of Writing a Diary Entry
You should include a variety of different styles/words/expression to enhance your e-diary. Below are some guides. We have covered these aspects in Canoe Diary.

- Talking to your diary
- Hey dear diary…today I’m going to share…..
- Hey Buddy. Did you miss me. Well I’ve got an amazing information for you. There were no
lessons today. You know why? It’s CNY eve. Yippee!!!!
- Add in personal comments… I thought it was a fabulous performance….I wonder how hard
the lion dancers would have trained? It requires a lot of self-discipline you know…
- Today we commemorated TDD. What do you think it means diary? To me, TDD is all
about……….
- Add in phrases from your Composition List
- Imagery / Metaphors …linked to your senses – sight/hear/touch/smell/taste…Revist the 3
posts in January
- Hypenated words, Action/Sound Words

You have received your refresher lesson with Ms Lyana & Mrs Soh today.
Most of the featues have been covered.

I'm glad to say that all of you have completed your cover page and managed to save except 2 of you.

Your Task - Homework - Write the First Entry - CNY Celebrations

To all my lovely 4A pupils...

Compo Task 2

4A,

You should....

- Use at least 3 phrases from your vocabulary lists. Please underline them.

- Use either ACTION / SOUND words, HYPENATED / CAPITAL letters or ONE- LINERS.
( Do NOT use all the three -- just 1 or 2 will be sufficient)

- Give interesting endings and conclusions

REMEMBER - THE FOCUS IS the usage of the words in BOLD...

Extension for Composition 2

Lets us see some examples on how we can incoporate these ideas into this week's composition

1) Sound or Action Words

- "Splash....Splash.....", the waves hit our feet. We were having a fun time standing at the seaside feeling the soothing waves at our petite little feet.

- "Wahhhhh", the girl wailed uncontrollably as she finished telling us why she was all alone at the beach.

- The little girl tried to hold back her tears. Sob...Sob...Sob...She continued this throughout her conversation.

- My father volunteered to bring the girl to the hospital. We got into our car and drove away. Zoom went my father's car.

2) Hypenated / Capital Letters

- BOOM! All the girl heard was this thunderous sound, she explained to us.

- "Are you all R-E-A-D-Y for this wonderful day at the beach?"

3) One liners

- I wrote my name on the sand.
The waves washed it away.
I wrote my dad's name.
The waves washed it away again.

- I stacked my first bucket of sand. My brother stacked the second. My dad put on the third...but CRASH..our sandcastle collapsed.

- Why was this little girl crying? Was she lost? Was she sick? Was she hurt?

- Who is she? What is she doing here alone? Why did she come to me?

Focus for Composition 2

Innovative additions to the body of a Composition

4A,
Try using these strategies ( maybe 1 or 2) in today's composition

1. Using sound or action words
Example : Screech…., Crash…., Plop!. Thud!, Ring…., Splash…, Shh…., Snap…, Splat

2. Using hyphenated or Capital Letters
Example : T-R-O-U-B-L-E , BANG!, OUCH!,WATCH OUT…, STOP!, BOOM, HELP….

3. Using One – Liners or repeated phrases

Examples : -
I looked for her behind the bush.
There was no trace of her.
I looked for her behind the pillar.
Yet there was no sign of her.
I looked for Jill behind the door.
There she was!

Something has gone wrong.
Something has gone terribly bad.
Something really worse has happened.